tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504553034105507540.post7663803731815471991..comments2023-11-02T01:29:26.816-07:00Comments on McDonnell Writing: Prime Cut, a #fridayflash storyAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08236529774839136879noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504553034105507540.post-18846285598955077762010-07-12T04:31:10.630-07:002010-07-12T04:31:10.630-07:00I liked the voice of the characters. A lot!
And yo...I liked the voice of the characters. A lot!<br />And your pace was lightning-quick.<br />Good job, John!Cathy Olliffe-Websterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12729578896443750402noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504553034105507540.post-48681049275180961282010-07-10T18:11:28.139-07:002010-07-10T18:11:28.139-07:00Ah, revenge. ;)
I think a brick house might be be...Ah, revenge. ;) <br />I think a brick house might be better than a mack truck, but I got a kick out of this!Laura Enohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09982794146667832204noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504553034105507540.post-7318313557710855142010-07-10T13:09:44.816-07:002010-07-10T13:09:44.816-07:00Thank you all! I guess I did telegraph the ending,...Thank you all! I guess I did telegraph the ending, but as louise said, it's sometimes fun for the reader to know where the story is going right from the beginning, and just enjoy the journey. This was fun to write, and it did give me an appetite for steak (blush).Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08236529774839136879noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504553034105507540.post-9472854386446699362010-07-10T10:40:49.175-07:002010-07-10T10:40:49.175-07:00Too funny, and quite satisfying in a shameful way....Too funny, and quite satisfying in a shameful way. :)<br /><br />Love this story.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504553034105507540.post-81071238911442218962010-07-10T09:53:32.778-07:002010-07-10T09:53:32.778-07:00hahahaha! I always knew people steak would be amaz...hahahaha! I always knew people steak would be amazing ;-)<br /><br />Fun post!<br />~2<br /><br />looks like we both had meat on the brain this week ;-)Tomara Armstronghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17185889402088565686noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504553034105507540.post-86953515685944749922010-07-10T02:26:51.388-07:002010-07-10T02:26:51.388-07:00Funnily enough, I have decided not to have steak f...Funnily enough, I have decided not to have steak for dinner! Great story.Samhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00361651251233078437noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504553034105507540.post-83855531361878250472010-07-09T15:07:26.910-07:002010-07-09T15:07:26.910-07:00So human meat doesn't taste like chicken, then...So human meat doesn't taste like chicken, then. :)<br /><br />I also laughed at the didn't want to break a promise line! And John brought up a good point: a woman would not think being compared to a mack truck such a good thing, HAHA!<br /><br />What's going to happen to Joey now, I wonder.Marisa Birnshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17945909737147497606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504553034105507540.post-78649643582609279272010-07-09T14:58:53.399-07:002010-07-09T14:58:53.399-07:00Is it wrong that I really fancy a steak, now?
Abo...Is it wrong that I really fancy a steak, now?<br /><br />About the story, though: I like the twist but I did see it coming from the start - but that's not necessarily a bad thing. It's very satisfying to have your expectations fulfilled - makes you feel clever for working it out, you know? Good use of dialogue to characterize, although some of the dialogue itself wasn't all that realistic. Something to work on?<br /><br />Fun story, now where's my butcher's knife...Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504553034105507540.post-3486000796077134602010-07-09T11:30:37.742-07:002010-07-09T11:30:37.742-07:00Oooh! That gave me the jibblies! Very nicely done!...Oooh! That gave me the jibblies! Very nicely done! The "I didn't want to break a promise" line cracked me up!Monica Marierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03112762564137354581noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504553034105507540.post-22342070125451657072010-07-09T11:20:53.327-07:002010-07-09T11:20:53.327-07:00"she has a body on her like a damn Mack truck..."she has a body on her like a damn Mack truck"<br /><br />I can only imagine the eating disorders the compliment would cause, taken out of context.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6504553034105507540.post-71331436797395020992010-07-09T11:07:58.400-07:002010-07-09T11:07:58.400-07:00So that's why she wasn't crying. Getting r...So that's why she wasn't crying. Getting revenge is much better anyway. Good story!Eric J. Krausehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774468607814244185noreply@blogger.com